I am a kitten who loves to write, but I usually become too embarrassed to share it with others. I signed up for the SmutMarathon because I wanted to stretch myself and try to be a little braver as an author.
I wrote six different flash fiction pieces for round two and I chose the one that stuck in my head. I loved playing with words and making my story fit into the challange’s parameters. I am using the other entries I wrote as inspiration for larger stories.
I closed my eyes when I hit send and the wait for the results seemed like an eternity. I was gobsmacked to see that some of the jurors liked my writing and awarded me points in Round Two. I jumped and twirled for an hour after reading the results. It was a good feeling, and the feedback gave more more confidence as a writer.
I enjoyed all of the pieces in round two. I printed them all out and cut them up so I could see them as individual works. My plan was to give feedback on each one, but life got in the way and I was only able to write about a few. I was gathering up the slips of papers where I had written notes, and I wanted to share a few more of my thoughts about the entries.
This entry by Cousin Pons was a snapshot of a story and it made me laugh out loud. The miscommunication between partners was very clear and you could feel the exasperation in the woman’s voice. I loved how the characters personalities developed even in such a short piece. It’s just so funny!
38) Scenic Route
‘Have you ever considered,’ she said, pausing to wipe a globule of his cum from her lips.
‘What’s that honey?’
‘That I prefer the ache of sex that is a long, slow run rather than a sprint.’
‘Have you been reading those trashy magazines again?’
‘Just so husband dear. I know you work hard. You come home all sweaty and you want to screw and cum in my face. That’s natural. But just reflect for a moment and think, wouldn’t it be fine and dandy to take the scenic route now and again. A little sightseeing before you shoot your fucking load.’
‘You want me to get the station wagon out?’
Violet wrote an exceptionally erotic scene that had a lovely rhythm. The imagery was beautifully written and I could see the two characters in this moment. This would be a great beginning to a very naughty story, and it kept playing in my mind.
20) The Epiphany
The night air was cool as she pulled him by the hand from the throbbing nightclub and into the dim alley, her back immediately against the wall, his hand under her skirt, sinking into her silky wetness. It was always this way with them; too much whisky, never enough time. She pushed him to his knees and he looked up and saw her, silhouetted beneath the starry midnight sky, hands twisting in his hair, pulling his face to her succulent cunt. She was the Milky Way, he a speck of sand in awe of her. He realized in that moment that he didn’t just want this disposable lust. He wanted so much more.
And finally, I had a few notes on a very funny grocery store scene. Humor draws me in to a story especially when talking about sex, and this entry by Charlton Tod was excellent. I could envision two lonely people at the grocery store making eyes at each other over subtly suggestive foods. There was a grocery near my college campus that was a well known pick up spot, and this snippet of a story brought back fond memories of cruising for dudes with some of my old roommates.
39) Produce Seduction
Mary gaped at Come-N-Save’s hothouse cucumbers, still sheathed in thin plastic (seamed for her pleasure). It had been too long since she had a proper salad. As she placed it in her basket, she noticed a gentleman approach checkout with a box of cherry pie. Mary couldn’t help but giggle as she spotted ‘Hot and Ready’ on the side of the container, and wondered if he was in need of a proper dessert. His eyes glanced around just enough to notice the way Mary stared at him, and suggestively caressed the vegetable. With a crack of a smile, Mary mustered the courage to ask about his dinner plans. A night of eating out was just what she needed.
The SmutMarathon has been a learning experience for me and it’s thrilling to write for an audience. The connections I’ve made with new authors have given me so many fresh blogs and stories to read. I submitted my Round Three piece, and once again I nervously await to see how my work stacks up. I look forward to the entries created by the gloriously dirty minds for this challenge!